Reply To: CRAWLING BACKWARDS – First Five Pages
Thank you for your feedback, Jenny! It’s most helpful. Considering the feedback from everyone, I’m thinking that combining some parts to make them longer instead of smaller snippets might work best....
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I agree with the two lovely ladies above me–the transitions are a bit jarring. We go from present to past to present in the space of five pages. It leaves me feeling a bit whiplashed! Have you...
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Reply To: CRAWLING BACKWARDS – First Five Pages
Thank you for the feedback, Janelle! I’ve been trying to sort out how to make the transitions more obvious. These flashbacks just occur in Part One, and most sections are too short to make them actual...
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This is a very interesting premise. I, too, am intrigued and would love to read more. The opening about the body dying confused me a little. I like when we get to the letter and Rodney, so you might...
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Hi Kim! Thank you for reading my pages. I apologize if I didn’t make it clear, but the scenes in Part One go back and forth between present time and memories, so the scene with the woman is in the...
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I’m really interested in what’s in the letter. I’m not sure of the continuity thought. You’ve got him in the men’s bathroom, he gave his room key to the woman, then proceeds to his bedroom and the...
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Name: Jenna Miller Title of Manuscript: Crawling Backwards (Fiction) Word Count: 1250 Note: I’m not great with summarizing my own work, so if it’s too vague and you have suggestions on how to improve...
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